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易美教育前斯坦福招生官因卓尼女士深刻剖析藤校文书创作的黄金法则

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名校竞争白热化,易美教育助力学子从容应对全球化申请挑战

在全球教育资源高度竞争的时代,顶尖名校的申请难度持续攀升,学历含金量的稀缺性日益凸显。随着全球化进程加速和教育体系的动态调整,名校在录取中更注重申请者的多样性与个性化表现,而单纯依赖标化成绩或过度堆砌背景活动的传统方式,已难以满足名校日益精细化的评估标准。

在这一背景下,许多条件优秀但缺乏独特性的申请者,常常因无法与名校的核心价值观实现精准契合而失去机会。这不仅是学术准备的不足,更涉及文化差异、思维方式和表达能力等多方面的综合考验。

易美教育斯坦福招生官解码顶尖名校文书,成就个性化竞争力

为了帮助学生在全球化的申请竞争中脱颖而出,易美教育特别邀请招生官顾问委员会成员、斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士参与易美教育易讲坛系列主题讲座。在“易美教育·易讲坛”的系列活动中,因卓尼女士以藤校录取的实际案例为切入点,深度解析文书创作在名校申请中的重要性。

“当候选人的学术背景旗鼓相当时,一篇内容深刻、视角独特的文书,往往成为脱颖而出的决定性因素。” 因卓尼女士通过深入剖析成功申请者的文书特点,向学生展示如何通过个人故事的挖掘和有效表达,与名校的文化价值实现高度契合。同时,她分享了多篇令人印象深刻的优秀文书实例,为学子提供了实用建议与灵感启发。

易美教育作为中美国际教育咨询的领导品牌,始终致力于帮助学生突破传统申请的局限,以专业的教育资源整合能力和数据驱动的精准指导,全面提升学生的竞争力。在顶尖名校录取竞争日益激烈的当下,易美教育通过一体化精细服务体系,帮助学生清晰定位自身优势,深入挖掘潜力,最终实现从目标制定到录取结果的全方位成功。在未来,易美教育将继续深耕高端教育咨询领域,坚持“精英培养与个性化发展”并行的理念,助力学生在学术、职业与个人成长上迈向卓越,以卓越的服务品质和全球视野,为每一位学子铸就通往成功的桥梁。

 

嘉宾介绍

 

斯坦福大学前招生办副主任因卓尼女士

曾任斯坦福大学前招生办副主任;

曾在斯坦福大学工程学院任职11年的学生服务管理者;

为 800 多名工程专业的学生在招生、经济援助、学习进度等方面提供建议;

拥有9年职业生涯规划咨询师经验及7年教育咨询师经验

为什么文书那么重要?

Why may your essay be the most important piece?

在谈到文书之前,斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士先带我们回顾了一下申请的几大组成部分,包括成绩单,标化成绩,简历,推荐信等等,她将这些归类成了一个很有趣的部分,那就是已经取得的成绩或者成就,不管是以什么样的方式呈现,这些都已经在你的学术或者职业生涯上留下了一笔一划的印记,我们无法再改变。那什么是我们可以改变的呢?斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士给出的答案就是对于过去经历的感悟以及未来目标的规划,这也是为什么文书在每一个学生的申请里面占据了独一无二的地位,因为这是申请者唯一可以向学校表白的机会。

易美教育的斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士说道: “Your personal statement is unique to you and your own unique story and will set you apart from the hundreds or even thousands of others vying for a seat in the graduate program. Your goal is to have the admissions committee walk away after reading your essay thinking: I can envision taking them in my class, walking the halls, and being a good mentor, friend, and leader. They are smart and talented and fit perfectly at our school. Remember, your story will be compared to all the other stories of the applicant pool. Your job is to prove you are a better fit than many of the others. And this is where the essay comes in.”

在易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士的眼中,每一次对于学生申请材料的审核都是一次风险评估。“I like to think about the application review process as a sort of risk assessment. The admissions committee looks at each person and asks if we admit this person, are we risking that they won't succeed? Or will it be a problem? If you want them to feel confident that you are a good fit, you will succeed and you will be a good leader and mentor and make a positive impact on the program, class discussions, and community.”

易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士作为藤校招生官,她也承担着保证每一个录取的学生都能顺利毕业的压力,所以哪怕是一点小小的瑕疵很有可能成为拒信的导火索,因为没有招生官愿意接受那些他们认为有风险的学生。因此当我们申请当中的任何一部分出现问题的时候,比如GAP(休学),Probation(学术警告), Fail(挂科)等等,我们可以通过文书的部分力挽狂澜,证明我们已经克服了曾经的困难。

易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士是这么建议的: “You can use your personal statement to mitigate problems in your history. As long as you prove that you have solved those problems, you can talk about personal growth, overcoming an obstacle, conquering a challenge, and convince them that whatever those challenges were, they are now resolved and will not be a problem in the future.”

文书题目都大同小异吗?

Essay Prompts: They Are Not All the Same

在我们申请的过程中,最常遇到的文书题目就是personal statement(个人陈述)和statement of purpose(学术声明)。易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士根据多年的经验,这两者在大多数情况下是可以划上等号的,但是也有少数例外的,一个很典型的例子就是伯克利的文书。

因卓尼女士进一步解释道: “In many cases, the personal statement is the same as a statement of purpose. But for example, Berkeley asks for one of each with a different prompt. Generally speaking, a personal statement is more descriptive and an opportunity to talk about your soft skills, as well as your work and academic experiences. Whereas the statement of purpose may ask more about your work, academics, and career goals. If you are convinced your situation and experiences can authentically include a diversity component. You may consider, including those in your personal statement, but be sure that the admissions committee buys it. There is nothing worse than reading an essay about diversity while scratching your head thinking. If you have a diversity aspect, your personal statement can also act as a diversity statement in those cases. Remember, now diversity has more meanings than just ethnicity. It can include overcoming educational challenges, economic hardships, being the first person in your family to go to college, or even having a unique perspective or experience that will help you contribute to interesting discussions.”

相比于学术声明, 在我们的个人陈述中,我们可以更多的展现自身背景的多样性,这不仅仅局限于种族或是信仰,我们遇到的学术挑战,经济困难,作为家里第一个大学生等等都是可以成为我们的题材,但是请注意一点,我们要确保要写的背景足够特别,不然招生官在审核的时候对我们是一个减分项。

在我们的印象当中,不同学校或项目都有自己特殊的文书要求,很少有学生可以用一篇文章来申请不同的项目,我们需要根据不同的要求修改文章。易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士和我们透露了鲜为人知的文书诀窍:一般情况下,一篇已经完成的文书的80%是可以重复使用的,因为大部分的学校文书提示都非常类似,如果同时申请十几个不同的学校,我们只需要在结尾部分针对不同项目进行修改即可。“As you can see, if you apply to 15 schools, you may be looking at 15 completely different props. Please read them carefully and tried to craft one essay that you can use for each school with a different tailored ending paragraph for each. As I said, 80% of your essay can usually be reused, but the final paragraph should be very specific to each unique aspect of the schools you are applying for.”

一篇好的文书结构长什么样子?

What is the structure of a good essay?

好的文书结构并没有我们想象中的那么复杂,他们的共通点就是两个字:逻辑。最简单的方法就是根据时间轴展开我们的经历,从学术到职业经历都会显得非常顺理成章。当我们的经历非常丰富的时候,易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士向我们介绍了一种更加灵活的方法,我们可以将自己的各种故事情节草草地写在小卡片上,然后摆放在桌上,从中找到最好的文书叙述的思路和逻辑。

根据多年审核文书的经验,易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士概括出了文书通用的基本大纲: “Part one, describe an experience in a college class where you learn something new and interesting. Part two, that experience drove you to find an internship at a company that related to this new and exciting thing and describes what you learned there. Part three, you realize during your internship that you found your chosen field for your future career. Part four, while you were working at the internship, you discovered a problem you wanted to solve, but don't have the knowledge to do so. You need a graduate degree to get there. Part five, in graduate school, you hope to accomplish several things to prepare you for your future career. Part six, you want to attend this school because of these reasons. And after graduation, you plan on doing several things.”一篇好文章的结构有开头,中间和结尾开头从我们自身有趣的经历切入,中间展现我们的思考,结尾专门为申请的不同学校量身定做感兴趣的方面。

通过文书你想传递给招生官的信息是什么?

What is your message in your essay?

我们努力在文书中展现自身的学术和工作成就的时候,很多人经常在文书中忽略的一点是我们如何塑造自身的形象。在我们按照上面的文书大纲叙述的时候,一定要尽可能多的提供细节。

易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士举了个体现团队合作以及沟通能力的例子: “For example, you should choose an experience at work that can exemplify your communication skills, ability to work with a team, shows you are a helpful person and that you are a critical problem solver. If you write the essay, these things will shine through and impress the admissions committee. One of the most disappointing things in my work has been reading an entire essay and wondering what the message was. Generally speaking, that happens when the person stays very abstract and doesn't dig deep enough. Don't filter yourself too much. It is fine to talk about frustration when trying to solve a problem. Elation is when you solve it, sadness is when you suffer from disappointment, and joy is when you overcome an obstacle. It makes you human and real and will help the admissions committee picture you as a member of their community.”

对于易美教育斯坦福大学前招生官因卓尼女士来说,看完文书最失望的事情莫过于脑海中只有一个很模糊很抽象的印象,这往往是因为申请者没有能够深入挖掘自身的经历,或者过滤了太多自身的细节,甚至是不足的地方。你可以表达你的沮丧在你陷入困境的时候,也可以展现你的兴奋当你解决难题的时候,也许你并不是最完美的,但是你的形象一定是鲜活立体的。如果有一个和你各方面背景类似的学生在和你竞争,招生官通过这样的文书更愿意把你想象成他们未来项目的成员之一。

 

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